Attempts at the sample scripts

[pauljholden]

This looks great - feel though that your hero figure (standing in the doorway in pane 2 is the weakest of the -otherwise great - figures you've drawn).

[Steven Austin]

Thanks PJ thats really useful - in what way would you say he was weakest? Perhaps too generic in his stance?

[Steven Austin]

This looks great - feel though that your hero figure (standing in the doorway in pane 2 is the weakest of the -otherwise great - figures you've drawn).

Thanks PJ thats really useful - in what way would you say he was weakest? Perhaps too generic in his stance?

[pauljholden]

Yeah, It's a little unconvincing as a pose-if he's bursting in you'll want him standing more proud, if he's ready for battle he'd be turned slightly leading with his weapon.

(Had not intended so many double entendres )

Pj

[Steven Austin]

Hahaha!! Leading with his weapon rather than with his sack!! Thanks mate, i'll have a tinker.

[Steven Austin]

Yeah, It's a little unconvincing as a pose-if he's bursting in you'll want him standing more proud, if he's ready for battle he'd be turned slightly leading with his weapon.

(Had not intended so many double entendres )

Pj

Hahaha!! Leading with his weapon rather than with his sack!! Thanks mate, i'll have a tinker.

[Steven Austin]

Yeah, It's a little unconvincing as a pose-if he's bursting in you'll want him standing more proud, if he's ready for battle he'd be turned slightly leading with his weapon.

(Had not intended so many double entendres )

Pj

Hi PJ,

Advice taken - what do you think?

[pauljholden]

Much stronger - looks like a fights about to start.

[SuperSurfer]

I like that Steve. Got a bit of Ernie Chan/Chua to it.

[Steven Austin]

Much stronger - looks like a fights about to start.

Sweet, thanks PJ.

[Steven Austin]

I like that Steve. Got a bit of Ernie Chan/Chua to it.

Cheers SS, appreciate that.

[Simon Beigh]

I'm liking that, Steven. Very detailed, which I like. A touch of the Leigh Gallaghers about it, which I also like. I'd want to read more, and I understand the story even without any text.

Ticks all the boxes for me...

[Steven Austin]

I'm liking that, Steven. Very detailed, which I like. A touch of the Leigh Gallaghers about it, which I also like. I'd want to read more, and I understand the story even without any text.

Ticks all the boxes for me...

Thanks Simeon, 'ticking all the boxes' is high praise indeed. Thanks mate.

[Steven Austin]

Ok here are the pencils for page 2 - On starting the page I realised that in order for it to work as the writer intended with regards to character positioning the last panel on page 1 will need to be flipped so please ignore that boo boo for now.

Feedback would be greatly appreciated.

[Steven Austin]

Hmmm the last image came in a little large - here it is smaller.