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: Do you think the synopsis for my future shock is good enough?
: SebyCroft 03 October, 2017, 05:19:09 PM
Jesse is abducted by a being from a higher dimension who tells him about his plans for him, but Jesse will learn that the Misterious Man has something different in mind than what he claims.
That alien being,  though,  doesn't know that Jesse has surprises too, some surprises that will affect the entire universe.
What do you think, guys?
Can you give me some advice?
: Re: Do you think the synopsis for my future shock is good enough?
: Jim_Campbell 03 October, 2017, 06:34:17 PM
I'm afraid that's not a synopsis.
: Re: Do you think the synopsis for my future shock is good enough?
: pauljholden 03 October, 2017, 07:00:01 PM
Jesse is abducted by a being from a higher dimension who tells him about his plans for him, but Jesse will learn that the Misterious Man has something different in mind than what he claims.
That alien being,  though,  doesn't know that Jesse has surprises too, some surprises that will affect the entire universe.
What do you think, guys?
Can you give me some advice?

A synopsis would look more like this:

Jesse, a cowboy from the 1890s midwest is abducted by a mysterious man. The man, dressed all in black, is looking for something that he knows only Jesse knows about. He captures him and reveals that the man-in-black is in fact an Alien and that Jesse should be overawed by his weird alien powers.  Jesse though, it turns out, is in fact a time traveller from the far future, where the alien tech just looks antiquated, they're both on the hunt for the same thing - to the alien - a futuristic weapon of destruction, to Jesse, and antiquated weapon of his past. They fight. Jesse wins. Jesse returns home. The, after burying the alien in the grounds that later turn out to be area 51.

The end.

It's rubbish. But it's a synopsis.
: Re: Do you think the synopsis for my future shock is good enough?
: The Enigmatic Dr X 03 October, 2017, 07:44:41 PM
Dunno PJ. I've read worse.
: Re: Do you think the synopsis for my future shock is good enough?
: TordelBack 03 October, 2017, 08:22:45 PM
To clarify things a bit, SebyCroft, what you've written is a teaser or a blurb - it works as an advert for your story pitched to potential readers, but it's not what an editor wants. They need to know what your surprises and twists are going to be, and how they are delivered, not just the promise that there will be some. Set spoilers to maximum.
: Re: Do you think the synopsis for my future shock is good enough?
: Bolt-01 04 October, 2017, 08:34:44 AM
PJ- I've had 'much' worse for FQ.

SebyCroft- Tordelback hits the nail on the head there. The editor needs to know what the story is about- all the twists and turns- otherwise how will he know whether it is good enough.

Also- once you've got your pitch all worked out- please don't post the real thing on the internet.
: Re: Do you think the synopsis for my future shock is good enough?
: SebyCroft 05 October, 2017, 08:22:37 AM
So a synopsis is the summary of the story.
Thank you, guys!
: Re: Do you think the synopsis for my future shock is good enough?
: Lobo Baggins 05 October, 2017, 09:45:33 AM
Script Droid Alec Worley was kind enough to post a synopsis for a Terror Tale last year in this thread:

http://forums.2000ad.com/index.php?topic=43690.msg930478#msg930478 (http://forums.2000ad.com/index.php?topic=43690.msg930478#msg930478)
: Re: Do you think the synopsis for my future shock is good enough?
: TordelBack 05 October, 2017, 11:00:33 AM
Script Droid Alec Worley was kind enough to post a synopsis for a Terror Tale last year in this thread:

http://forums.2000ad.com/index.php?topic=43690.msg930478#msg930478 (http://forums.2000ad.com/index.php?topic=43690.msg930478#msg930478)

Damn, that's a good thread generally!  Quick read of that (and associated links) and I feel inspired to write my own Future Shocks...
: Re: Do you think the synopsis for my future shock is good enough?
: SebyCroft 06 October, 2017, 04:37:15 PM
I have one more question, should I describe the looks of characters that aren't really important in the story?
: Re: Do you think the synopsis for my future shock is good enough?
: pauljholden 06 October, 2017, 08:14:06 PM
Not in the synopsis, unless their looks at either important for the plot or the scene (or mood)

"Jesse, the last of the gruff outlaws of the 1890s midwest..."

Minimum amount of words for maximum impact.

-PJ
: Re: Do you think the synopsis for my future shock is good enough?
: SebyCroft 07 October, 2017, 08:20:34 PM
Thank you very much.