Great idea, some nice dialogue, but overall a convoluted mess
Take somethign simple and make it really really complex - the landmine itself is complicated - it has all these bells and whistles that we need to keep explaining.
That carries over to every otehr aspect. The coropration wont keep a soldiere alive for 4 weeks to recuperate, but will allow their child to be supported indefinitely.
The emotional beats just seem really weird - the child doent seem to understand anything that is going on, but everyone else is acting odd too.
Ruby wanders into what is clearly a warzone without any kind of trepidation - Ruby is also happy to take a moment to grin at the view while the Doctor is STANDING ON A MINE!
I'm going to shout and shoot the man standing on a mine which will explode and potentially take me out because he is holding a tube. No one seems to quite understand the situation or any consequences, they just do the thing that moves the plot along to the next beat.
It was all very odd.
Take somethign simple and make it really really complex - the landmine itself is complicated - it has all these bells and whistles that we need to keep explaining.
That carries over to every otehr aspect. The coropration wont keep a soldiere alive for 4 weeks to recuperate, but will allow their child to be supported indefinitely.
The emotional beats just seem really weird - the child doent seem to understand anything that is going on, but everyone else is acting odd too.
Ruby wanders into what is clearly a warzone without any kind of trepidation - Ruby is also happy to take a moment to grin at the view while the Doctor is STANDING ON A MINE!
I'm going to shout and shoot the man standing on a mine which will explode and potentially take me out because he is holding a tube. No one seems to quite understand the situation or any consequences, they just do the thing that moves the plot along to the next beat.
It was all very odd.