Attempts at the sample scripts

[Nezotholem]

Hello,

I'm an aspiring comic book penciller.
I've sent this 6 pages of JUDGE DREDD- Cycle of Violence to 2000AD and I got a brief feedback (but it was amazing to get for the first time a feedback from a professional and specially from Matt Smith).

But as I wrote before, the answer was very brief  and I really would like to have the point of view of few more people because more informations, critics and advises I'll get, more quickly I'll improve my draw.

http://nezotholem.deviantart.com/gallery/

[pineapplehead]

Awe great work there, love your style, dynamic and flowing, great talent

[Professor Bear]

If I was Bolt-01 or Richmond, this thread would be like Christmas.

[Bolt-01]

Heh, I've been in touch with quite a few folks from here- and the pages above are a fine example. Some lovely storytelling going on.

[TordelBack]

Now that one has flair and solid skills.  The use of the scar is very well done.  Congrats, Nezo!

If I was to make some criticisms, I'd say that I find the dead mother overly sexualised (and you're hardly alone in this), some of your very neat "inset" figures and linking panels might be a bit small on the printed page, and I wonder about the wisdom of doing quite so much background shading at the pencilling stage - although it does make your foregrounds pop, so it certainly works here.

But seriously, in a thread that never fails to impress, these pages are outstanding.

[Dark Jimbo]

If I was to make some criticisms, I'd say that I find the dead mother overly sexualised (and you're hardly alone in this)...

In fairness, the script does specify:

Panel 1:

1. Overhead Med. Shot, a woman in the attire of a streetwalker lies amidst broken glass & domestic debris, her eyes staring at us lifelessly, blood tricking from a surprisingly small wound on her temple.

[antodonnell]

For a change of sample script here are my pages of the 2000AD Thought Bubble 2015 sample script. I really enjoyed doing this and have received lots of strong feedback based off these pages to improve my art going forward. The weekend was really fun and exciting. Obviously a shout out to Joe Palmer for taking the prize with his nice slick/clean style. I had a chance to see the other pages they were really good.

Higher res images, layouts and pencils can be found here:

http://comicart.antodonnell.com/comic_sequential_art.html

[Paul Moore]

It does have a 2000ad look Ant
...heres mine (low rez), didnt even make the shortlist this year





...hope this works linking from twitter

[CrazyFoxMachine]

Both of those are bloomin' smashin!

[Old Tankie]

Both of those are very good, the winner must have been excellent.

[antodonnell]

Some really strong shots and there Paul. I remember your entry last year I really liked that also.

This was my first year to enter so I learned that it's only judged on the first page on the day. That caught me out bad.

It did add some excitement to the weekend

[Paul Moore]

Thanks for saying that, and yeah enjoyed the event, strange that, that Italian pro artist entered (all above board i guess) in the end they handled it right by separating him from you guys

[Fungus]

Privileged to see Ant's original pages, they were utterly progworthy and the standard was genuinely brilliant across the board. Paul's on a par too, to be honest.

When you see 7 versions of the same thing, all different, all effective, it's properly fascinating.

Jo[e]'s winning entry struck me as a mashup of Dean Motter and Darwyn Cooke. Yep, that good!

[The Enigmatic Dr X]

I am by no means an expert, but I like that work Paul. It's got a 70s pencilled vibe, which is a Good Thing.

[antodonnell]

Thanks Fungus, it was nice randomly bumping in to you guys.

It was weird the italian artist was pushed at the end clearly his stuff was amazing work. I have a feeling he'll be working on something for 2000AD / Megazine anyway. As was mentioned on the day it's a contest for new talent not established talent. I stupidly forgot the artist's name ( I blame nerves )  and would like to check out more of his work if anyone remembers :/ Thanks.