Title: First page from my Dredd screenplay inside!!
Post by: Thread Zero on 09 May, 2002, 06:39:36 PM
Post by: Thread Zero on 09 May, 2002, 06:39:36 PM
Am still waiting for official confirmation to post here so here's the first page from my Dredd Reckoning script:
Script is copyright scojo and Writers Guild of Amercia registered! So you can't nick it!:)))
FADE IN:
INT. MEGA CITY ONE - ROWDY YATES CONAPTS - APARTMENT - DAY
Over credits, a visual montage of JUDGE DREDD getting dressed. Close up of Dredd putting on utility belt, knee, eagle and shoulder pads in dim lit apartment room. Boots tightened. Lawgiver gun Mark two is placed in gun holster. Close on badge being put on. First glimpse of the name Dredd on badge. Door slides opens and Dredd (seen from behind) exits.
INT. CORRIDOR - DAY
Angle on Dredd's shadow cast on wall of corridor. Pan away to side on shot of Dredd. Face and helmet still not shown. Apartment doors on either side of the corridor. Close on Dredd's feet and legs walking down corridor. A MAN in his thirties, dressed in Mega City clothing, carrying a bag comes up to Dredd. Man smiles weakly but face shows apprehension. He hurries on by.
A cleaning robot passes by. The small machine has various arms with cleaning implements attached. Cleaning the floors and walls. Dredd reaches the corridor's elevator. Activates the elevator's panel, doors then open. Steps inside. Doors shut. Elevator descends to destination. Dredd leaves elevator.
INT. CORRIDOR - DAY
He walks to a door. On it a sign. It reads: "Justice Department Bike Pool. Authorized Personnel Only." Dredd has in hand a card, similar to a phonecard. He places it into a readout panel swipe slot. On panel display - "Authorization granted." The door's lock is opened. Dredd activates a button and door slides open.
INT. BIKE POOL - DAY
A dimly lit chamber. Dredd activates a light switch. Light beams onto a raised platform in the center of the room. On the platform, shining in the glare of the light is Dredd's lawmaster bike. Dredd walks to it. Near to the raised stage is a pedal. Dredd presses his boot down on the pedal and the stage lowers so that the lawmaster bike is level with the floor.
Dredd climbs onto bike. Places card into bike's ignition. Engine starts. He presses a button on the bike's front control panel. Vid-screen is activated. The screen is divided into two sections. The left side has a series of graph bars showing fuel, ammunition and status levels. At optimum status. The right section is a map of the local area. A red light on the map flashes, indicating bike's current location.
Script is copyright scojo and Writers Guild of Amercia registered! So you can't nick it!:)))
FADE IN:
INT. MEGA CITY ONE - ROWDY YATES CONAPTS - APARTMENT - DAY
Over credits, a visual montage of JUDGE DREDD getting dressed. Close up of Dredd putting on utility belt, knee, eagle and shoulder pads in dim lit apartment room. Boots tightened. Lawgiver gun Mark two is placed in gun holster. Close on badge being put on. First glimpse of the name Dredd on badge. Door slides opens and Dredd (seen from behind) exits.
INT. CORRIDOR - DAY
Angle on Dredd's shadow cast on wall of corridor. Pan away to side on shot of Dredd. Face and helmet still not shown. Apartment doors on either side of the corridor. Close on Dredd's feet and legs walking down corridor. A MAN in his thirties, dressed in Mega City clothing, carrying a bag comes up to Dredd. Man smiles weakly but face shows apprehension. He hurries on by.
A cleaning robot passes by. The small machine has various arms with cleaning implements attached. Cleaning the floors and walls. Dredd reaches the corridor's elevator. Activates the elevator's panel, doors then open. Steps inside. Doors shut. Elevator descends to destination. Dredd leaves elevator.
INT. CORRIDOR - DAY
He walks to a door. On it a sign. It reads: "Justice Department Bike Pool. Authorized Personnel Only." Dredd has in hand a card, similar to a phonecard. He places it into a readout panel swipe slot. On panel display - "Authorization granted." The door's lock is opened. Dredd activates a button and door slides open.
INT. BIKE POOL - DAY
A dimly lit chamber. Dredd activates a light switch. Light beams onto a raised platform in the center of the room. On the platform, shining in the glare of the light is Dredd's lawmaster bike. Dredd walks to it. Near to the raised stage is a pedal. Dredd presses his boot down on the pedal and the stage lowers so that the lawmaster bike is level with the floor.
Dredd climbs onto bike. Places card into bike's ignition. Engine starts. He presses a button on the bike's front control panel. Vid-screen is activated. The screen is divided into two sections. The left side has a series of graph bars showing fuel, ammunition and status levels. At optimum status. The right section is a map of the local area. A red light on the map flashes, indicating bike's current location.
Title: Re: First page from my Dredd scree...
Post by: Thread Zero on 09 May, 2002, 06:49:24 PM
Post by: Thread Zero on 09 May, 2002, 06:49:24 PM
Hey if my script is put up here and you lot like it, would you like to petition Rebellion to use it?
I'm serious. If you read it and like it, why not?
I think it's very good. At the end of the day us fans know what makes a great Dredd story.
Oh well wait and read it I guess...
scojo
I'm serious. If you read it and like it, why not?
I think it's very good. At the end of the day us fans know what makes a great Dredd story.
Oh well wait and read it I guess...
scojo
Title: Re: First page from my Dredd scree...
Post by: Oddboy on 09 May, 2002, 06:49:52 PM
Post by: Oddboy on 09 May, 2002, 06:49:52 PM
I like the plot - very clever!!
But seriously:
Nice intro, but there's no way we can (ehem...) 'judge' if it's good or not with just page one...
But seriously:
Nice intro, but there's no way we can (ehem...) 'judge' if it's good or not with just page one...
Title: Re: First page from my Dredd scree...
Post by: johnnystress on 09 May, 2002, 07:16:03 PM
Post by: johnnystress on 09 May, 2002, 07:16:03 PM
Agree.Nice intro
But you know the way that lawgivers recognise each judge by their palmprint? well wouldnt that make things like swipe cards obsolete?
your nerdishly....
But you know the way that lawgivers recognise each judge by their palmprint? well wouldnt that make things like swipe cards obsolete?
your nerdishly....
Title: Re: First page from my Dredd scree...
Post by: Tiplodocus on 09 May, 2002, 07:16:36 PM
Post by: Tiplodocus on 09 May, 2002, 07:16:36 PM
We know all about Dredd so we think "cooool" but to the man in the street, a bloke getting dressed and then getting into his car isn't exactly the most exciting start to a screenplay.
There have been notable exceptions HARPER with Paul Newman where the opening sequence fills you in on loads of detail about the character and what he is like.
I'm sure as an aspiring screenwriter, you've read William Goldman's "Adventures in the Screen trade" - it describes it in good detail.
There have been notable exceptions HARPER with Paul Newman where the opening sequence fills you in on loads of detail about the character and what he is like.
I'm sure as an aspiring screenwriter, you've read William Goldman's "Adventures in the Screen trade" - it describes it in good detail.
Title: Re: First page from my Dredd scree...
Post by: Thread Zero on 09 May, 2002, 07:28:45 PM
Post by: Thread Zero on 09 May, 2002, 07:28:45 PM
I promise you the first few scenes, about a minute and a half long, are the calm before the storm.
It really is just establishing some mood before we hit the big meg itself. Once you see what follows, it all fits into place.
I really wanna post the script in its entirety but I'm waiting for official word from Rebellion Towers.
Otherwise I may get banned from this site forever!:)
Some people might think that's a good thing!
scojo
It really is just establishing some mood before we hit the big meg itself. Once you see what follows, it all fits into place.
I really wanna post the script in its entirety but I'm waiting for official word from Rebellion Towers.
Otherwise I may get banned from this site forever!:)
Some people might think that's a good thing!
scojo
Title: Re: First page from my Dredd scree...
Post by: Buddy on 09 May, 2002, 08:08:05 PM
Post by: Buddy on 09 May, 2002, 08:08:05 PM
Why would Rebellion object to you placing this online? They don't have a problem with fan art online so why not a fan screenplay???
Explain
Explain
Title: Re: First page from my Dredd scree...
Post by: Thread Zero on 09 May, 2002, 08:12:18 PM
Post by: Thread Zero on 09 May, 2002, 08:12:18 PM
I guess you are right Umpty.
I just sent the whole script to Wake via email.
So Wake it's over to you.:)
scojo
I just sent the whole script to Wake via email.
So Wake it's over to you.:)
scojo
Title: Re: First page from my Dredd scree...
Post by: Thread Zero on 09 May, 2002, 08:18:11 PM
Post by: Thread Zero on 09 May, 2002, 08:18:11 PM
Wake has emailed me. Says he will ask Rebellion later.
Oh isn't it exciting!:)
Don't forget to bring your popcorn!
scojo
Oh isn't it exciting!:)
Don't forget to bring your popcorn!
scojo
Title: Re: First page from my Dredd scree...
Post by: Wils on 09 May, 2002, 08:47:24 PM
Post by: Wils on 09 May, 2002, 08:47:24 PM
'Elevator descends to destination.'
But isn't Dredd's apartment in the basement?
Wils
But isn't Dredd's apartment in the basement?
Wils
Title: Re: First page from my Dredd scree...
Post by: Thread Zero on 09 May, 2002, 09:05:29 PM
Post by: Thread Zero on 09 May, 2002, 09:05:29 PM
Er... well..
How do I get out of this?
I know! My Dredd is an alternate Dredd in an alternate dimension!
It's exactly the same as the 2k one, except for some unknown reason, Dredd's apartment is not in the basement.
Dimensions, who understands em!
scojo
How do I get out of this?
I know! My Dredd is an alternate Dredd in an alternate dimension!
It's exactly the same as the 2k one, except for some unknown reason, Dredd's apartment is not in the basement.
Dimensions, who understands em!
scojo
Title: Re: First page from my Dredd scree...
Post by: Oddboy on 09 May, 2002, 09:19:59 PM
Post by: Oddboy on 09 May, 2002, 09:19:59 PM
Just say it was a typo - it should read "accends" to the ground level.
No film script remains unchanged by the time it's made so you'll have more than enough time to iron out the nerdy quibbles.
No film script remains unchanged by the time it's made so you'll have more than enough time to iron out the nerdy quibbles.
Title: Re: First page from my Dredd scree...
Post by: W. R. Logan on 10 May, 2002, 02:41:59 AM
Post by: W. R. Logan on 10 May, 2002, 02:41:59 AM
>I'm serious. If you read it and like it, why not?
>I think it's very good. At the end of the day us fans know what makes a great Dredd story.
Please can we have Scojo's script put on the web site!!
Then I won't have to have it appearing in my inbox like a big turd you can't flush.
La Placa Rifa,
W. R. Logan.
>I think it's very good. At the end of the day us fans know what makes a great Dredd story.
Please can we have Scojo's script put on the web site!!
Then I won't have to have it appearing in my inbox like a big turd you can't flush.
La Placa Rifa,
W. R. Logan.
Link: Class Of '79
Title: Re: First page from my Dredd scree...
Post by: Thread Zero on 10 May, 2002, 03:12:37 AM
Post by: Thread Zero on 10 May, 2002, 03:12:37 AM
Logan,
You may, just may like it.
Worth reading it first, eh?
scojo
You may, just may like it.
Worth reading it first, eh?
scojo
Title: Re: First page from my Dredd scree...
Post by: W. R. Logan on 10 May, 2002, 08:09:28 AM
Post by: W. R. Logan on 10 May, 2002, 08:09:28 AM
>Logan,
>You may, just may like it.
>Worth reading it first, eh?
>scojo
I may just but after reading your snippets over the last few months I doubt it.
Are you going to be at Comics 2002 where you can talk to me about your ideas over a pint, if you are then at least I know I'll get a good nights sleep 8-)
La Placa Rifa,
W. R. Logan.
>You may, just may like it.
>Worth reading it first, eh?
>scojo
I may just but after reading your snippets over the last few months I doubt it.
Are you going to be at Comics 2002 where you can talk to me about your ideas over a pint, if you are then at least I know I'll get a good nights sleep 8-)
La Placa Rifa,
W. R. Logan.
Link: Class Of '79
Title: Re: First page from my Dredd scree...
Post by: Matt on 10 May, 2002, 02:55:03 PM
Post by: Matt on 10 May, 2002, 02:55:03 PM
I think it reads pretty cool Scojo. I like the idea of Dredd getting ready for patrol. Reminds me of a similar scene in Batman. I can see where its going. Dredd leave Rowdy, camera zooms out from Lawmaster revealing more of MC-1. block wars & crime everywhere. Cool. Can't wait to read it.