Cuckoo
First page
3 horizontal lines 2 frames in first 2, 3rd is one long panel.
Ist Frame : Blackness tiny prick of light
2nd Frame: Holographic human head appears against darkness, it appears to be forming form light: "We have arrived" The head is that of a bold man.
3rd Frame Head fully formed but still appears projected from light: "
Your memory should be returning now, I have completed the survey of life forms."
4th Frame "The dominant creature here is biologically different from us but their slave race appears to have been seeded by our ancestors."
5th long frame, Flaming Meotorite crashing toward fields.
Page 2 traditional 6 frames
1st page: Head again: You shall infiltrate the dominant race and learn their ways for the good of the Empire.
2nd frame Close up of skeletal bone socket. Boxed dialogue:
"The races on this plan live in a pyramid structure, the dominant species surrounded by families of servants."
3 rd frame Eye gel appears in socket. Pupiul can not be seen yet.
"We are unsure of their control mechanism over our cousins we must discover this to free them."
4 th Frame muscle starts to appear on skull, still very close up on socket, lid covers eye. The dominant form is diverse in colour and size you will appear as that which shows the most power over the slaves.
5th frame Skin starts to appear over muscle:
"The body nears completion, I shall transfer your conciousness."
6th frame: What appears to be a large Meteor ploughing into the field.
Page 3 again 6 frames.
Holographic head again. "Once you leave here you will not be able to contact home. As we are unsure of their powers of control we do not wish to make any transmissions they can trace back to us,"
Second Frame car travelling past field
Third Frame Male driver turns to woman. "I'm sure I saw something coming down here, lets look"
Woman looks bored.
Fourth Frame: Holographic head: You should soon be able to control the new bodies limbs, it is an exact copy of one of these creatures young, it will be awkward at first.
Fith Frame: Humans stumbling through field find meteor:
Sixth Frame Man and woman close up, open mouthed.
Page 4 again 6 frames
Head " Two of the slaves are approaching; you shall approach them and return with them to their habitation."
Frame 2: "I must go now and the technology will destruct behind me".
Frame 3: Head starts to fade "Good luck son of Empire."
Frame 4 The two humans are moving around the meteor
Frame 5 Total darkness again but with a line of light as the shell begins to open."
Frame 6 Close up on womans surprised face "Oh my God...."
Page5 One big picture with a frame on the bottom right hand side:
The meteor is open and an incredibly cute puppy can be seen looking up at the humans: Womans dialkogue in box "...he's so cute."
Final panel
Woamn looks at man "Can we keep him"
Man "Well it costs a lot he'll need injections, and feeding ... and he'll have to be spayed."
Fin
I know it's not great but what do you all think?
Maybe a last picture of the dog raising an eye row roger Moore style and saying " Woof?"
Sorry to bring this up, but there was a Future Shock in about the late 80's where an alien transfers consciousness to a domestic cat; and the last frame involves its human owners suggesting a 'trip to the vet'.
Jayzus B. Christ: Remembering the unimportant things in life, so you don't have to.
Damn! I wrote one on drugs allowing you to see the face of god and found something too similar to that in another anthology. I think it's going to be incresingly hard to think one up without it being done in some form before. Back to the drawing board then.
For what it's worth, I thought the Superman piss-take version was a great idea.
>I wrote one on drugs allowing you to see the face of god...
For me it's usually the face of the bloke in the 24-hour shop round the corner.
i may give that one a shot. I never did treust the blue haired geek. Apart from being unconciously derivative does attack of the super dog read OK? Its the first one I've ever actually written and took ooh at least 20 minutes to write.
...Followed by the faces of some Jaffa Cakes and Onion Rings.
It reads a lot better than some of the Future Shocks that have actually made it to 2000ad. good luck with the whole thing.
Have you tried the Scriptdroids yahoo-group? I think you'd find it uselful.