Title: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: The Enigmatic Dr X on 29 June, 2010, 10:14:39 AM
Post by: The Enigmatic Dr X on 29 June, 2010, 10:14:39 AM
I was working on a script last night. A character gets thrown through the air by a demon into a glass screen. (Well, it could happen).
The panel description is:
BUIST smashing into the screen behind the desk. The impact is like a car crash; she is dead, a broken marionette in an explosion of glass.
There's no speech in the panel, but I think it could do with some sound effects. Thing is, I'm shockingly bad at coming up with these. "Tinkle" just doesn't cut it. "Crash" is naff. Any ideas? Or just leave the violence of the scene to the artist?
If I go with your idea you get to have a suicidal copper or a demon named after you.
The panel description is:
BUIST smashing into the screen behind the desk. The impact is like a car crash; she is dead, a broken marionette in an explosion of glass.
There's no speech in the panel, but I think it could do with some sound effects. Thing is, I'm shockingly bad at coming up with these. "Tinkle" just doesn't cut it. "Crash" is naff. Any ideas? Or just leave the violence of the scene to the artist?
If I go with your idea you get to have a suicidal copper or a demon named after you.
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: Richmond Clements on 29 June, 2010, 10:18:54 AM
Post by: Richmond Clements on 29 June, 2010, 10:18:54 AM
I's start it with a 'K' because it's got a nice hard edge to it.
SOmething like 'Kkrrrrishhh' perhaps?
SOmething like 'Kkrrrrishhh' perhaps?
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: Rio De Fideldo on 29 June, 2010, 10:38:33 AM
Post by: Rio De Fideldo on 29 June, 2010, 10:38:33 AM
"Ssktshh"
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: Jim_Campbell on 29 June, 2010, 11:18:12 AM
Post by: Jim_Campbell on 29 June, 2010, 11:18:12 AM
Quote from: Richard T Field on 29 June, 2010, 10:38:33 AM
"Ssktshh"
Multiple 'S's makes a sibilant, which is too soft for an impact.
TBH, it's possible to over-think this sort of thing. As long as the letterforms offer plenty of opportunities to make spiky, splintery shapes, the onomatopoeic aspect is less important. A simple KRAAAASH would probably suffice, or perhaps a SKTASH?
Cheers
Jim
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: Van Dom on 29 June, 2010, 11:23:29 AM
Post by: Van Dom on 29 June, 2010, 11:23:29 AM
KTIIISSHHH!
:P
:P
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: flip-r mk2 on 29 June, 2010, 11:24:07 AM
Post by: flip-r mk2 on 29 June, 2010, 11:24:07 AM
Tinkle, tinkle. ;)
filip
filip
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: CrazyFoxMachine on 29 June, 2010, 11:27:03 AM
Post by: CrazyFoxMachine on 29 June, 2010, 11:27:03 AM
Try to avoid onomatopoeia that may later become an offensive word. I know you can't predict these things but DO try.
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: WoD on 29 June, 2010, 11:42:11 AM
Post by: WoD on 29 June, 2010, 11:42:11 AM
Quote from: Van Dom on 29 June, 2010, 11:23:29 AM
KTIIISSHHH!
:P
Very close to what I was thinking...but without the 'k';
TTIISSHHHH
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: Rio De Fideldo on 29 June, 2010, 11:58:53 AM
Post by: Rio De Fideldo on 29 June, 2010, 11:58:53 AM
The Ss sound was supposed to represent the sound of the glass starting to crack before it finally shatters.
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: Jim_Campbell on 29 June, 2010, 12:01:25 PM
Post by: Jim_Campbell on 29 June, 2010, 12:01:25 PM
Quote from: WoD on 29 June, 2010, 11:42:11 AM
Very close to what I was thinking...but without the 'k';
TTIISSHHHH
That'll look pants not the page. It's all right angles and verticals, plus it's not dramatic enough -- that's the sound of someone dropping a wine glass!
Cheers
Jim
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: radiator on 29 June, 2010, 12:07:35 PM
Post by: radiator on 29 June, 2010, 12:07:35 PM
QuoteTry to avoid onomatopoeia that may later become an offensive word. I know you can't predict these things but DO try.
I remember a few years ago that John Wagner went through a phase of sneaking fruity sound effects into his Dredd scripts, like:
"WANKAA!", "WAAAANK!" etc....
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: M.I.K. on 29 June, 2010, 12:18:48 PM
Post by: M.I.K. on 29 June, 2010, 12:18:48 PM
KRATINKLESMASHINKLETISH!
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: The Enigmatic Dr X on 29 June, 2010, 01:45:09 PM
Post by: The Enigmatic Dr X on 29 June, 2010, 01:45:09 PM
Think I'll go with "KTASH". If the thing is ever done, the letterer can always change it.
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: Richmond Clements on 29 June, 2010, 01:55:40 PM
Post by: Richmond Clements on 29 June, 2010, 01:55:40 PM
Quotethe letterer can always change it
You're learning..!
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: The Enigmatic Dr X on 29 June, 2010, 02:31:08 PM
Post by: The Enigmatic Dr X on 29 June, 2010, 02:31:08 PM
It's all about retaining control while creating the illusion of empowerment.
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: House of Usher on 29 June, 2010, 07:06:31 PM
Post by: House of Usher on 29 June, 2010, 07:06:31 PM
KAA-TISSSSSHH!
KER-TISSSSSHH!
SMASHHHH!
KER-TISSSSSHH!
SMASHHHH!
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: Noisybast on 29 June, 2010, 08:13:29 PM
Post by: Noisybast on 29 June, 2010, 08:13:29 PM
I vote SKAAAASH!
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: Daveycandlish on 29 June, 2010, 08:24:37 PM
Post by: Daveycandlish on 29 June, 2010, 08:24:37 PM
Needs a hard and dramatic K at the start, but I don't think it needs Tish - Ktish just sounds like a club comedian having a punchline punctuated by a drummer.
In fact just skip the vowels and have Krrsssh!!
In fact just skip the vowels and have Krrsssh!!
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: Jared Katooie on 29 June, 2010, 09:53:57 PM
Post by: Jared Katooie on 29 June, 2010, 09:53:57 PM
Good choices would be:
Skkrsshhh
or
Kkrsshh
Skkrsshhh
or
Kkrsshh
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: The Enigmatic Dr X on 29 June, 2010, 10:03:46 PM
Post by: The Enigmatic Dr X on 29 June, 2010, 10:03:46 PM
I might be shite at sound effects but I'm avoiding anything that makes me think "b'dm tish", like the cymbal clash at the end of a bad joke.
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: IAMTHESYSTEM on 29 June, 2010, 10:06:36 PM
Post by: IAMTHESYSTEM on 29 June, 2010, 10:06:36 PM
KOW-A-BUNGA?! ;)
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: Jim_Campbell on 29 June, 2010, 10:27:28 PM
Post by: Jim_Campbell on 29 June, 2010, 10:27:28 PM
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: House of Usher on 29 June, 2010, 10:36:51 PM
Post by: House of Usher on 29 June, 2010, 10:36:51 PM
SKA-TASSSHHH!
KER-SMASH! ;)
KER-SMASH! ;)
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: The Enigmatic Dr X on 29 June, 2010, 10:56:22 PM
Post by: The Enigmatic Dr X on 29 June, 2010, 10:56:22 PM
Quote from: Jim_Campbell on 29 June, 2010, 10:27:28 PMQuote from: Noisybast on 29 June, 2010, 08:13:29 PM
I vote SKAAAASH!
Gets my vote!
Cheers
Jim
Excellent. Anyone would think you did this for a living.
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: TordelBack on 30 June, 2010, 09:51:21 AM
Post by: TordelBack on 30 June, 2010, 09:51:21 AM
All well and good, but in over-rated 'reality' breaking a big pane of glass actually makes an initial very sharp, loud cracking sound as the tension on the sheet is broken, before all the shards start parting with the more familiar 'krsssh' sound. I'd vote for KRAKAAASH.
Title: Re: Script sounds - broken glass
Post by: SuperSurfer on 30 June, 2010, 12:20:18 PM
Post by: SuperSurfer on 30 June, 2010, 12:20:18 PM
See the 'OnomontoPOWia' archive http://www.heromachine.com/category/onomontopowia/ (http://www.heromachine.com/category/onomontopowia/) for some superhero glass breaking sound effects amongst others, such as this:
