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But Rambo, there is no dialogue on the first half page.

So how you know my dialgoue is so s***?

scojo

When you can't read a speech bubble without pausing for breath, then it's clunky, m8! :)


If you knew what you were talking about, I might agree.


scojo

Clunky or not, at least my dialogue has a modicum of wit.

See my crime swoop scene, air tax gags, futsie scene, perp with offensive shirt on scene, first action scene etc...


Oh yeah...
My dialogue aint clunky!!!!!!!!

scojo declunked

Love doctor

I can't stand Mike Carey's dialogue. Actually that's not entirely true. In any other comic it would be fine but I think refrences to s*** bring 2k down.

The s**t line was an all time low for 2k. John, Alan or Pat would never stoop so low. Not in 2k anyway.

Story seems fine but I wish this guy wouldn't write apples and stairs dialogue all the time.
Now that is clich?!!

"Er guv take a butchers at his ugly mug. Right car crash he is and no mistake."

And so on....

Bec and Kawl:
Seems ok to me. All humour stories always provoke a love/hate reaction from the fans.

As I neither love or hate it, I guess I'm not a fan.:P

I agree about Kev's art. Very loose. So loose he makes Essex girls look like virgins!

scojo

Yeah I agree Ed.

No more about my script!

Until I post Possession!

Ha ha ha ha.

Or MK13 bans me.

Ha ha ha.

Or shooshi has me locked up for being a raving loon.

Ha ha ha

Shmoo moo moo to you all.

xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

By the way, does anyone know where I can find the official 2000AD message board?

Ha ha ha ha.

scojo

And by swearing at me and being abusive, you have made certain that I never give any input to anything of yours again.

Wils

Well I am hardly gonna take someone seriously when they can't even get quote my dialogue correctly in the first place.

scojo

Wils,

Sorry for being rude. It's just you criticise me, yet don't get your facts right in the first place.

Kind of like shooting yourself in the foot bfore you stand up!

You can understand why I was annoyed!

There are probably typos in it. I found two when I was reading it. There's probably more. No one's perfect. I can't type very well and my spelling does have its off days.

Although I still think your comma crusade is ******. And you can quote me on that:)

Anyway sorry if I was rude.

scojo

I think you owe me an apology Wils.

Let's see how long it takes him to apologise, shall we:))

scojo with stopwatch on

AND WILS, ANOTHER THING!

For fuck's sake (sorry for swearing but) if you are gonna quote my bad grammar at least get it right in the first place!!!!!!!!!!!!

It is:

Dredd
I'm sure you do, Leach. Still no harm in checking, is there.

GO CHECK IT IF YOU DON'T BELIEVE ME!

NOT what you pasted:

WRITTEN GRAMMAR & PUNCTUATION

Example:

"I'm sure you do Leach, still no harm checking, is there?"

I joked about this earlier, but it demonstrates both bad written grammar and poor punctuation. Using your original sentence, corrected it would be:

'I'm sure you do, Leach. Still no harm checking, is there?'
or even
'I'm sure you do, Leach. Still, no harm checking, is there?'

So PLEASE GET YOU FACT RIGHT IN THE FIRST PLACE!

THERE IS A FULL STOP AFTER LEACH.

OK?????????????????

scojo

COMMAS TOO!

I was referring to the use of "" of course.

Is that a punctuation mark?


Anyway, your criticisms are pathetic. Like eveyone else here who can't find fault with the actual story,  you go on about where commas should be!!!!!!!!!

Can't you see how pathetic that is:))

Seriously. Who made you the expert on commas?

Where does it say you can't put 3 commas into one line?

JUDGE MY STORY NOT COMMAS.

scojo

Eh??????

When did I verbally attack you?????

Wils, you got me wrong man. Seriously.

EXCUSE ME WILS, BUT SHOW ME WHERE IT SAYS YOU CAN'T PUT COMMARS INTO A SENTENCE?

According to your flawed logic, no sentence can ever be broken up into more than one or two commas!

I have never read so much rubbish in my life.

Read that line but imagine a slight pause after every comma.

Oh yeah, the line works doesn't it!!

Jeeez I have heard some drivel here but....

Your second point:

JESUS H CHRIST THER ARE NO PUNCTUATION MARKS IN A SCRIPT.
DO YOU UNDERSTAND????????????????????

NO " IN A SCRIPT. I WILL SAY IT AGAIN. NO PUNCTUATION MARKS IN A SCRIPT.

GOD U R THICK!

Take your comment about knifes. Or do you mean knives? A typo I admit. I do know the difference.

BUT TWO OUT OF YOUR THREE STATEMENTS ARE SHEER BOLLOCKS.

EMAIL ME A LIST OF ALL MY TYPOS PLEASE?

I BET THERE ARE VERY FEW.

scojo

You summed it up perfectly Wils.

All your criticisms of my dialogue are just that.

Pedantic.

Oh look Dredd says I am the law and you're under arrest, meathead!

No you're wrong! It's:

I am the law. You're under arrest, creep!

Everyone can write the same line in a slightly different way.  Considering I wrote the script, I think I should be entitled to most of the lines.:)
And to know in what context they are said.

scojo

Jesus, do you have to keep going on about it?

Haven't you heard of closure?

Milo

Ha ha ha

scojo

Ignoring this painful study of my dialogue, such as:

I'm sure you do Leach, still no harm checking, is there?

which should be

I'm sure you do Leach, no harm checking.*

(*That pearl of wisdom courtesy of Gordon Rennie, I mean Milo:)

I was wondering................

Does anyone actually LIKE my script?

Yeah you can go on about this line or that forever if you want, but did you like the story?

The action?

Would it make for a good film?

No one has actually said so yes or no. All they do is go on about lines of dialogue.

Love to know what you thought of the PLOT.

The end sequence for example. No one has mentioned that.

scojo

Jim,

You say I am too formal in my Dredd speak.

That's why (nearly) everytime my Dredd arrests someone he says,

You're under arrest creep.

Please show me where I use miscreant or something similar?

See the end of the roadster chase. What does Dredd say to the perp:
YOU'RE UNDER ARREST CREEP.

Not miscreant or chap or vermin or scoundrel but CREEP!

Now according to you, my dialogue is too formal. So I guess "You're under arrest creep" is too formal as well.

At least get your facts right before you post.



scojo